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作者: 稍后    时间: 2009-3-19 19:36:42     标题: Mockingbird - Eminem 自我感觉良好O(∩_∩)O~

本帖最后由 稍后 于 2009-3-19 19:38 编辑

录这个可是累死我了 但感觉成绩是可喜滴 前途是光明地 革命还是需要努力地。。。
望高手多指教啦 呵呵
always tell you?
straighten up little soldier
stiffen up that upper lip
what you crying about?
you got me

[verse 1:]
hailie, i know you miss your mom and i know you miss your dad
well i'm gone but i'm trying to give you the life that i never had
i can see you're sad, even when you smile, even when you laugh
i can see it in your eyes, deep inside you want to cry
cuz you're scared, i ain't there
daddy's with you in your prayers
no more crying, wipe them tears
daddy's here, no more nightmares
we gon' pull together through it, we gon' do it
laney, uncle's crazy, aint he?
yeah but he loves you girl and you better know it
we're all we got in this world
when it spins, when it swirls
when it whirls, when it twirls
two little beautiful girls
lookin' puzzled, in a daze
i know it's confusing you
daddy's always on the move, mamma's always on the news
i try to keep you sheltered from it but somehow it seems
the harder that i try to do that, the more it backfires on me
all the things growing up his daddy that he had to see
daddy don't want you to see but you see just as much as he did
we did not plan it to be this way, your mother and me
but things have gotten so bad between us
i don't see us ever being together ever again
like we used to be when we was teenagers
but then of course everything always happens for a reason
i guess it was never meant to be
but it's just something we have no control over and that's what destiny is
but no more worries, rest your head and go to sleep
maybe one day we'll wake up and this will all just be a dream

[chorus:]
now hush little baby, don't you cry
everything's gonna be alright
stiffen that upper lip up little lady,
i told ya daddy's here to hold ya through the night
i know mommy's not here right now and we don't know why
we feel how we feel inside
it may seem a little crazy, pretty baby
but i promise momma's gon' be alright

[verse 2:]
it's funny
i remember back one year when daddy had no money
mommy wrapped the christmas presents up
and stuck 'em under the tree and said some of 'em were from me
cuz daddy couldn't buy 'em
i'll never forget that christmas i sat up the whole night crying
cuz daddy felt like a bum, see daddy had a job
but his job was to keep the food on the table for you and mom
and at the time every house that we lived in
either kept getting broken into and robbed
or shot up on the block
and your mom was saving money for you in a jar
tryna start a piggy bank for you so you could go to college
almost had a thousand dollars till someone broke in and stole it
and i know it hurt so bad it broke your momma's heart
and it seemed like everything was just startin' to fall apart
mom and dad was arguin' a lot so momma moved back
on the chalmers in the flat one bedroom apartment
and dad moved back to the other side of 8 mile on novara
and that's when daddy went to california with his cd and met dr. dre
and flew you and momma out to see me
but daddy had to work, you and momma had to leave me
then you started seeing daddy on the t.v. and momma didn't like it
and you and laney were to young to understand it
papa was a rollin' stone, momma developed a habit
and it all happened too fast for either one of us to grab it
i'm just sorry you were there and had to witness it first hand
cuz all i ever wanted to do was just make you proud
now i'm sittin in this empty house, just reminiscing
lookin' at your baby pictures, it just trips me out
to see how much you both have grown, it's almost like you're sisters now
wow, guess you pretty much are and daddy's still here
laney i'm talkin' to you too, daddy's still here
i like the sound of that, yeah
it's got a ring to it don't it?
shh, momma's only gone for the moment

[chorus]

[verse 3:]
and if you ask me too
daddy's gonna buy you a mockingbird
i'mma give you the world
i'mma buy a diamond ring for you
i'mma sing for you
i'll do anything for you to see you smile
and if that mockingbird don't sing and that ring don't shine
i'mma break that birdie's neck
i'd go back to the jewler who sold it to ya
and make him eat every carat don't *** with dad (haha)
作者: xiaoxi1004    时间: 2009-3-19 19:58:17

还可以撒····················
作者: Eggdanny    时间: 2009-3-19 23:48:43

发音有点怪怪的....
作者: 稍后    时间: 2009-3-19 23:59:07

3# Eggdanny 能具体说说不啊
作者: FoShizzo    时间: 2009-3-20 05:31:08

很不错啦。个人最喜欢的是高潮部分
作者: Billie.J    时间: 2009-3-20 12:16:35

LZ舌头挺溜的,英文发音、节奏感还有FLOW都还不错,不过个人建议再多放入一些感情,会让整首歌更有FEELING~~~
作者: 清一色    时间: 2009-3-20 13:56:24

挺流利的~
如果有点阴阳顿挫,再加点感情就好了~
不然显得很平淡。
作者: zhangziyia    时间: 2009-3-20 20:45:53

支持支持,好东西
作者: ssf    时间: 2009-3-20 23:13:18

我听着感觉也不错,哈哈哈哈
作者: 乱嚣张    时间: 2009-3-21 12:32:15

绕啊绕的挺HIGH的!就是听起来没有感情...
作者: breanne    时间: 2009-3-23 15:14:56

显然这里的评价比music80的更精确~~不过我还是以厚道鼓励作为个人原则
作者: breanne    时间: 2009-3-23 15:24:43

我多么希望能把我在伴奏酷的财产转移到这来啊,这里东西多,而且普遍便宜,可就是赚钱麻烦,不带存钱给利息的……
作者: shinebobo    时间: 2009-3-23 15:53:27

你唱的很好啊~~很有感觉的呢~~加油哦~~
作者: FoShizzo    时间: 2009-3-23 16:27:26

xianlai 目前最好听的 mockingbird,  支持
作者: breanne    时间: 2009-3-24 10:43:07

今天来了,再帮你顶上去吧
这首确实很强大
作者: 日番谷东狮郎    时间: 2009-3-24 13:53:34

节奏踩得很准~~~~厉害
作者: taylor-wang    时间: 2009-3-25 20:19:57

awesome~!!!i like it
作者: thomsonwen    时间: 2009-4-12 10:27:43

这首歌很难唱的,楼主rap得可以啊,哈哈,发音,节奏还是很到位的··
作者: iandee    时间: 2009-4-12 21:32:16

其实唱的很好的!节奏掌握的好!
期待你的新作品!
作者: kevinscottdj    时间: 2009-4-13 05:34:15

like we used to be when we was teenagers
but then of course everything always happens for a reason
~~~~~~~~~~~~
mommy wrapped the christmas presents up
~~~~~~~~~~~~
i'll never forget that christmas i sat up the whole night crying
这三句我还没见到过比你说的还溜的
10个有8个是打结过去的
第九个是我,mommy wrapped the christmas presents up溜不起来
第十个就是你,很溜
至于其他的就不值得说道了
作者: cjaysonhuang    时间: 2009-4-13 06:58:02

Nice done man!!!
作者: chelsea-lampard    时间: 2009-4-30 17:04:42

楼主真的唱的很好啊!我嘴唇很薄,但是念得不那么快!楼主应该多加点感情和那种咒骂的声音!呵呵!加油!
作者: 小阿凯    时间: 2009-5-26 10:42:46

你不是人
你是神~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
你是仙来RAP神
作者: zl3889    时间: 2009-5-26 11:09:50

已经很不错很不错了。free
作者: 檬小鱼    时间: 2009-5-26 11:52:46

总体还挺不错,就是前面一开始的那一段怎么觉得每句结束的地方都在拖音啊……需要改善一下
作者: FoShizzo    时间: 2009-6-6 20:28:09

xianlai 最好的mockingbird.
作者: ColbyDonis    时间: 2009-6-7 09:49:55

很温柔的“阿姆”...
作者: komawing    时间: 2010-1-13 12:38:51

我开始迷恋哥了...我也是喜欢唱他们的歌    你的那首animal  真是牛!!
作者: 稍后    时间: 2010-1-13 23:38:13

28# komawing
呵呵 谢谢支持啦 很高兴能有人喜欢 我会努力滴
作者: 四喜    时间: 2010-1-14 02:24:31

这还是第一次听稍后同学rap
虽然帖子时间有点久了,但仍惊喜
个人觉得后面部分比前面流利。。。
作者: K    时间: 2010-1-14 22:29:22

阿姆的歌唱这样已经不错了~ 伊最牛逼的就是intonation~ 美国人都学不来啊
作者: kingyes    时间: 2010-1-15 01:08:30

看了评论 感觉这里的人还是很会鼓励人的..

说一句 你很多音律都抓错了
作者: 稍后    时间: 2010-1-15 15:16:18

32# kingyes 我对说唱没什么研究 出错也正常的 能具体说说么 以后改进下
作者: 11910000    时间: 2010-1-15 18:09:46

对,是太滑的感觉,尾音要有节奏可能好点,感情。。
作者: kingyes    时间: 2010-1-15 18:52:35

33# 稍后

第一句的 what you crying about?   你的what you音调变了 这句主要是降调

第二句: but i'm trying to give you the life that i never had but i'm 那里开始又错了

这就是开头部分 其他的你自己仔细听吧
作者: kevinlymon    时间: 2010-1-15 19:16:50

还可以~~听起来 还不错~~
作者: 康佛神    时间: 2010-1-30 03:02:27

来了,稍后的摇滚很厉害。。。。
作者: giraffesnm999    时间: 2010-1-30 14:33:47

不错的翻唱啊~~~~~~~~~~~~~
作者: e.tee    时间: 2010-2-28 12:47:04

我觉得挺好的!!!
不过还是像前面的人说的,
加入多点感情。。
作者: longltj520    时间: 2010-5-13 01:04:10

3楼还嫌发音不好?这是我见过发音最好的翻唱了 加点感情!!完美了!
作者: 瞳颜    时间: 2010-6-9 12:52:29

我觉得很好听诶,节奏发音什么的都不错
就是有点小的重音听着怪怪的,
作者: jeenyong1    时间: 2010-6-9 13:56:41

声音再有力就好了 总体很不错 楼主加油!
作者: bongjigiu    时间: 2010-6-16 08:52:33

总体不错啊  就是缺少感情色彩
作者: Erica    时间: 2010-6-17 11:14:42

lz唱得真好。。
作者: sin6    时间: 2010-7-18 13:23:14

回复 7# 清一色


  阴阳顿挫。。。。晕   怪吓人的。。。




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